Dr Whittington, this feedback is vague and very misleading.
pretty good! […] other than that, very good!
What about the draft is good? What are the strengths of the piece that the author can focus on if reviewers feel that significant edits are necessary?
I personally will say that this is definitely not good—it's a very common premise ("thing that kills people for no reason") and we see variations of the same sort of object get deleted off the site every week. Furthermore, the formatting will need more adjustment than just the bolded headings; the entire spacing is skewed to the left.
Author, I highly recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you make the idea more interesting.
Furthermore, definitely read over this essay on common SCP pitfalls to get an idea of what elements to avoid putting in an SCP article, as well as this page: http://www.scp-wiki.net/things-what-do-a-thing-an-essay-on-things for examples of how to spice up the classic overused "thing that does a thing" SCP formula.
