SCP Foundation

So, this is my obligatory Nobody headcanon tale, which I hope you'll find interesting. Thanks to KindlyTurtleClem, YossiLeiner, KnightAlaska, pr0m37h3um, and Countless Skies for critiquing and reading this!

Good tale as usual, but my favorite part is how it jumps straight into "They're dying" instead of vividly describing all the parts of death

Oh man the feels. That hit hard like a punch to the gut. Even the O5 of all people are not able to escape the fear of what death is. The fact that we might die alone one day with no one to remember us as the light slowly fades with no hope of it returning.

+1, Great work Author.

“Will you remember meeeeee”

But honestly, very nice tale. The beginning was a bit confusing with the whole desert thing but I am assuming that was intentional.

Another think I like is how you included SCP-006 The way you wrote 05-1 is what I would expect, no thinking much about death due to their position and the amount of the security seems like something 05-1 would think.

Finally you actually put 05 designation number rather then just leaving it as 05-█.

An interesting and well written tale, a good blend of several of my favorite things; Nobody and The Feels™

I personally, however, dislike the idea of Nobody=SCP-4999. It just doesn't really feel right in my opinion, having these two characters (well, Nobody is very expandable for writing) be blended into one single entity. A surprising twist, but not one that sits in my stomach very well. I still find this to be an +A tale however, so it still earns my upvote.

Your prose is certainly competent and well-done, but something about the execution of this puts me off- its pacing is a bit too rushed, and you essentially tell rather than show all the emotional beats you want the reader to feel, making it feel too explicit and on-the-nose. I'm afraid it's going to have to be a downvote for me, but there's good stuff in here- it's definitely an interesting concept.

I don't like the prose. It feels insubstantial and laconic. It honestly makes reading through the article a chore.

This tale has been translated into Spanish and Chinese! The Spanish translation can be found here and the Chinese translation can be found here. Thanks to Yorick1 for the Spanish translation and DF-thirteen for the Chinese translation.

I agree that the prose in a lot of places here could be touched up, it feels repetitive in a lot of places, especially the beginning. It's close to being something really cool, though. I hope some further revisions might get it there. Maybe adding some more specific imagery to the memory of the people who have been forgotten, in situations like the one O5-1 finds himself in here. It struck a mood for me, so I'm not downvoting, but it was hard to read through in a lot of spots so I can't in good faith upvote it either. +0