First posted this draft a few weeks back, got some good advice and edited it since then. Looking for feedback on the new version. I tried to cut down on extraneous info while still keeping the background I wanted for the item. Specifically, I'm wondering how I'm doing with implications; if certain things aren't clear that need to be, or if I state some things too plainly, please let me know.
Since I'm still new to this site, I don't know how much editing has to (or should) be done before I can post this to the site. If anybody could provide some pointers on that, it would also be appreciated. Thanks in advance for your help!