Author, before I begin my quick review, do take note:
- Please don't just link us a sandbox draft. This is the Ideas forum. Drafts should be posted in the Drafts forum. Give us a quick explanation of the concept. We don't need to see all the complicated details that would be present in a draft; we're helping out with the core idea. Link a sandbox only as optional reading or if a reviewer asks for it.
Despite this, I'll still review your basic concept.
A few line by line mistakes:
a level of intelligence similar with the one of a 8-year old human
Some strikethroughs of info regarding the SCP must be replaced with the current revised info. So. after the incident, what is the SCP's level of intelligence at now? A 20-year old?
It also seems objects cannot to come to life onto the canvas,
Is this meant to be 'objects cannot come to life on the canvas'? On that note,
no matter the individual's intention
'regardless of the individual's intentions' sound better.
such as Quenya (from the Lord of the Rings series)
Delete this. Unless needed in cases where the subject matter needs elaboration, you don't have to add examples to back up your point.
Conceptually, I can see that your story deviates slightly from 089's story, namely the incident. However, it's only 'slightly', meaning that if it's posted on the site right now, some readers might downvote it immediately for it being almost like 089.
Hence, you have to make it so that the idea is more unique and not like a copy of 089. Some examples include changing the SCP's personality and attitude, such that from the start, its personality isn't fun and cheerful like 089 is. Another idea, though more questionable, is having it interact with 089 itself, or the researchers making a reference to 089.
That said, it's going to be quite difficult to change the draft a whole lot, since its description is just 'a stickman version of 089', so you might want to consider asking other prominent critics for help in how to make the story different.
That's all. For your next draft, make sure you post it on the Drafts forum, not the Ideas forum!
Drafts and Critiques forum: http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/c-50864/help:drafts-and-critiques
