Rogue Transit
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Rogue Transit
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Summary:
Anyone here ever been to NYC? If so, you probably encountered this.
It starts out interesting, but right now it doesn't really seem to go anywhere - it's just a train that takes you wherever you want. I understood what it is, but it doesn't make me feel any particular way about it.
It does raise a lot of questions, so you have a lot of options for where to take it. I'd be curious to find out more about:
- What does the graffiti say? Is it just normal graffiti? Is it the same every time?
- Who are SCP-XXXX-02? Are they human? Are there any records of them from before?
- What happens if the passengers talk to each other? For example, one might mention "this is the X train", then another says "Wait, I thought this was M", causing alarm and confusion. How would SCP-XXXX-02 react to that?
- What happens if the passengers ask to go somewhere outside of New York?
I think I could try and make someone care about one of the 02s.
An 02 leaves the train for the first time near the end of the audio log you read, and The Foundation would have the opportunity to apprehend and have a talk with it, leading to answering your questions on what they are exactly.
I could also have a testing log before all this with a D-Class personnel trying to confuse 02 and other passengers with these statements and questions.
Do you think this would, or wouldn't work?
Analyzing the graffiti wouldn't be difficult at all because the researchers could just look at the pictures.
In addition to nomad's comments, I'd like to point out that you could probably just replace all of the redactions in this article with actual locations without compromising security
Also, unless this train is particularly red, I think you meant rogue transit.
I definitely meant rogue transit. I actually realized that as I posted and went 'NO!'
And I could definitely add a location to the DATA EXPUNGED, however, the REDACTED was a time, so I'd rather not fill that in.
EDIT: Yay! I found out how to edit the title.
OK!
I made some edits. It's labeled "draft."
Please ignore other tabs.
And if you do read them: no it's not an actual thing.
Any comments would be appreciated!
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