First SCP draft. http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/mr1madness
Once again critique will be greatly appreciated.
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SCP-XXXX is not to come into contact with skin, if SCP-XXXX comes into contact with skin isolate the subject and inform ██ ███████.
The comma is grammatically incorrect. This should be two sentences, or the clauses should be at least separated by a semicolon.
Also, redactions in the containment procedures are not usually advised. How are the people responsible for SCP-XXXX supposed to know who to inform, if their name is blanked out?
No photographic or video capture are to be used near SCP-XXXX, two armed guards and a researcher are to be posted inside of the cell, staying at a maximum of 4 meters away from SCP-XXXX.
Again, this isn't grammatically correct, the first comma should be a full stop. The first sentence isn't really comprehensible either, as I'm not sure what "video capture" is, and I'm fairly certain "are" is also incorrect with that combination of words.
Also, how long should the researcher and the armed guards stay inside the cell? Forever? You'd probably need to specify the times at which they shift between the personnel.
Standard equipment will be supplied to document SCP-XXXX.
You need to specify what standard equipment is. You don't have to go into too much detail, but you can specify what most of the equipment is for so we have a vague idea. Also, you don't need to call it document SCP-XXXX. Just SCP-XXXX will do :)
In appearance SCP-XXXX resembles a dagger.
If SCP-XXXX is a dagger, it's a dagger. Unless you're trying to imply that it's really something else in disguise, it's not really necessary to say it resembles anything. I know other articles say "SCP-XXXX resembles X", but they're probably older articles from a time when the site was more lenient.
The blade is made out of steel and has four unknown symbols carved into it, more symbols are located on the base of the wooden hilt with the word "Keeper" written under them. When inside of the 4 meter safety zone the SCP begins to slowly move towards whoever has stepped within 4 meters of SCP-XXXX, those within 2 meters will start to hear muffled whispering and start having visions of dark humanoid figures watching them.
This has the same comma issue, as previously mentioned. These should probably all be new sentences. Also, how does SCP-XXXX move? Does it float, or just kind of nudge itself along the floor?
SCP-XXXX was located █████ █████████ on ██-██-████.
SCP-XXXX was located in █████ █████████ on ██-██-████.
The male who had found SCP-XXXX was a farmer in █████████. The following log was taken when Task Force ████-███ arrived at Site-██.
You probably need to specify how the Foundation became aware of the anomaly. Sure, a farmer can find a weird object, but then how does the Foundation magically know about it? Truthfully, this is something never fully explored in articles, but it isn't explored enough here. To give you a start, SCPs usually get handed into local authorities, where Foundation staff might be embedded within police forces, so that might be an option.
Task Force member: "All the crops have died and have turned black within proximity to the SCP, measuring now."
Task Force Member: "SCP Secured. Dead Zone is a 6 meter circle with the SCP being located within the centre."
I quite like the log, but in-universe people don't refer to things as "the SCP". In this case, "the object" would work better.
Task Force ████-███ returned to the nearest foundation facility with no trouble.
The tone here is off, it sounds too casual.
It is still unknown what had caused communications to cease, a number of tests have proven that SCP-XXXX does not interfere with radio transmissions.
Another comma issue. I would use a semicolon instead.
that photo and/or video begins to emit a low humming noise that gets louder over time.
How does a photo make a noise?
The humming slowly turns into a high pitched scream and causes nausea, temporary deafness and blindness while extended exposure to this noise can lead to death or insanity.
"Scream" makes it sound human. Is it supposed to sound like a human scream, or just a really loud noise? Also, insanity is borderline okay, but driving people to "death" is just too much, especially when it's not really specified as to how it actually does this. Does it burst the eardrums, for example? Also, how does a noise make people nauseated or make them go blind?
Also, this is a huge nitpick, but I'd put a comma after "blindness".
The noise persists until the image or video are destroyed.
The noise persists until the image or video is destroyed.
If SCP-XXXX comes into contact with skin the subject will begin hallucinating and will refuse the removal of the SCP from their person.
"Removal of the SCP from their person" reads weird, and again, referring to it as "the SCP" isn't a thing, like before.
If given the order to release the SCP the subject will appear distressed and panicked on the release of SCP-XXXX, the subject will remain in this state until SCP-XXXX re-enters their hands.
Another comma issue, new sentence instead.
Researcher ██████ unexpectedly broke into the containment area of SCP-XXXX and had killed both guards to get SCP-XXXX.
How did he/she kill the guards?
Everything in the interview log.
Dialogue Rule: When writing dialogue, read it out loud, for real. If it feels at all unnatural to say, it's not likely that anyone would actually say it.
This is from the Rules of Thumb page, which I highly recommend looking over. Simply put, there's a lot of odd or incorrect punctuation in the interview log, such as too many dots in the ellipses, missing full stops, missing commas, etc. These all need to be fixed.
Researcher ██████ was found dead inside the containment area with gashes to his chest and arms.
Gashes on his chest and arms.
Since this incident the amount of guards has been increased to four.
You'd need to specify that these guards are the guards assigned to SCP-XXXX, otherwise it just sounds like these are the only guards that the Foundation has, or the only guards in the world.
If cut by SCP-XXXX the subject will feel pain but no wound will show, the blade simply passes though flesh.
Another comma issue, I'd replace it with a semicolon here.
Another test was admitted on SCP-XXXX.
Reads weird.
SCP-XXXX was safely removed from the volunteer's possession. The volunteer went missing later that day.
Normal text would work here; you don't need the computerised stylisation.
[A:6] All testing on SCP-XXXX and the black figures that accompany it, is to be ceased and SCP-XXXX is to be moved to a more secure containment with soundproofed steel walls and the glass is to be replaced by 30 mm thick bulletproof glass.
The comma should be removed, and this should be separated into at least two sentences. Also, an order like this should go in the containment procedures.
Okay, overall, this is a dagger that makes you hallucinate, makes crops die, makes videos and photographs really noisy, and makes you really want it. It's a cursed item, which is an SCP pitfall. Overall, this isn't very interesting.