Future Entry: SCP-096
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Future Entry: SCP-096
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So I think you might have stumbled upon the fundamental issue we are going to have with future entries.
Every problem is going to be solved by shooting shit into space.
If we just take it as a given that some time around 2150 the Foundation shot every single SCP off in a random direction in space, then we need some other stuff in there to make this worth reading, and I'm not seeing it. A lot of this article is just about the same as the OG article and the changes/cuts you've made haven't really enhanced it.
I'm just really unsure about this on the basic, idea level. This rings a bit like a paint by numbers future entry, I really think to do future entries, especially on the wildly popular SCPs, you need to have some real element of reimagining in there.
This, basically.
For any "future entry" to be successful, you're not slightly altering the original document to reflect new containment standards. You need to completely rewrite the original document with new containment standards in mind, and then show how effective/ineffective they are, while at the same time entertaining the reader.
It's not enough to re-write SCP-173 as a future entry so that the procedures no longer require walking into the containment cell; it would require more story to it as well. Say, insert implications that 173 is actually a child from an intellegent and incredibly long-lived extradimensional species. And that it has long since passed its species' critical period for development, thus essentially making it a wild animal.
In that sense, a "future entry" is partially a re-imagining of the SCP (or a better understanding of the anomaly due to research or more information gathered about it).
On a side note, your point on 173 feels like it is a mutated infant of the Weeping Angels. Although the aspect of it reduced to a wild animal due to the Foundation's actions is intriguing.
your point on 173 feels like it is a mutated infant of the Weeping Angels.
Well, if nobody on the site knew better, 173 would already be considered a malformed Weeping Angel…
But the latter part of my hypothetical would be where you get most of the upvotes; it's not enough that we go "Oh, there's more of 'em." It's, "Oh, there's more of them, and we accidentally horribly mistreated the one we have, and the rest probably won't react well to that…"
The primary issue is that in 096's article, it is slated for termination and there's an incident report leading up why it would be slated as such.
From 096's page,
Termination order has been approved, and is to be carried out by Dr. ███ on [DATA REDACTED].
Putting that aside, it is fair to say you're aiming for a Tale a la Revised Entry, yes? The article itself doesn't add on much, other than saying that 096 will be contained in space and we will call it Neutralised. I won't say an SCP is neutralised by sending it up to space. Neutralised is when the thing is no longer anomalous (paraphrased from the Object Class guide). Given that its properties work on its images, it would be Euclid even while in space ('cos we ain't taking chances).
And the general flow of the narrative is 096 breaching containment while in space, which is played out relatively straight and is fairly standard (the anomaly is loose and is caught later on, and classified as Keter due to difficulties in containment).
I'm not exactly sure how you may proceed from here, but you ought to consider what kind of story you want 096 to be in. Consider what a reader would feel after reading this. In awe? Terrified? WTF? LOL? Most people on the site would know 096 so repeating its description won't really help much; a Tale grants the author an option to do things you otherwise couldn't do in an SCP file (such as writing from the SCP's POV for instance).
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