Site -.
In site what?
Two guards are to be stationed outside of its room at all times. No one other than authorized personal personnel can come into the room.
What is the reason for any of this?
SCP-2353 is a young male of unknown origins.
A male what? Human? Dolphin? Centipede?
We can deduce he was born in America and has spent part of his life as a homeless person living from place to place.
Where in America? How can that be "deduced"? Also, avoid "we".
Not much else is known about him but our investigation will continue.
This sentence doesn't need to exist.
called [DATA REDACTED]
a broken down house
Out of tone.
seemed like a gathering point of teenagers
Out of tone.
the SCP hotline
There's no way this could exist.
had received reports of an artifact that was making people [DATA EXPUNGED].
Making people bake cookies?
No further information is known about the incident.
A squad
A squad of what?
was sent to the area to retrieve the artifact. when Instead, they found SCP-2353 holding onto it.
The boy turned to look at the containment group
Out of tone.
he immediately dropped
Out of tone.
what seemed like a [DATA EXPUNGED].
What seemed like a bowl of chocolate pudding?
It fell to the ground
Out of tone.
and [DATA EXPUNGED].
…and did a little dance?
The containment group quickly rushed in
Tone error.
escorting the boy
Wrong tense.
off the premises
A little off-tone.
the [DATA EXPUNGED]
The pudding?
swiped the area.
I'm assuming you meant to say "swept the area". That would be out of tone.
to the facility
Which facility?
examined thoroughly to see if there were any abnormalities with the child.
This doesn't make sense.
He is abruptly 11 to 12 years old
Did you mean approximately?
seems Caucasian
What evidence do you have that might suggest otherwise?
he doesn’t seem to react quickly to visual or audio signals meaning he might lack a bit in motor functions, other then light malnutrition and dehydration we don’t see anything else wrong with him, we were lead to believe the artifact would cause horrid results upon its victims, and yet this child was holding onto it without a single scratch, that alone is a mystery.
Run-on sentence.
yet I and the rest of the examiners have this strange feeling that there is more than what meets the eye.
We will continue the examination as per-usual and see if the child is 100% percent good to go.
seeing his tattered clothing show that perhaps he is homeless and not of around this area.
I can't understand this.
We had made an astounding discovery, despite putting him in the facility’s MRI scanner, no images of the boy show up, it was as if we were scanning thin air, we checked to see if the machine was working properly, and to our surprise the machine was working perfectly, after this we tried taking pictures of the now labeled SCP-2353 and just like the MRI scanner, all we got were pictures of the back wall.
Large run-on sentence.