Date: 27 Jan 2009 00:55
Number of posts: 24
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We need to add to this…anyone else want to take a crack at it?
I'm at a school computer right now, so I can't edit it now without the filter removing all instances of "the 'F'-word" (which would be bad), but, when I get home, I'm planning on editing this thing for stuff like tense consistency, and maybe joining in the fun. Of course, if anyone wants to tackle the proofreading before I get to it, go ahead, but, er, yeah….
Alright. Here I go!
Okay, I fixed it up a bit, but I decided that the current ending is actually pretty good as it is.
Piffy is an SCP Foundation Moderator, Lv. 9001 Squishy Wizard, and Knight of the Red Pen.
So, do the good doctors then go on to rob the bank?
It's a good thing I can tell you're not serious. Others might not realise this, and without me to tell them, they might react badly.
Don't like how this cuts off, and I feel it's contrived that the robber just puts on Bright's shiny necklace.
Besides that, though, I like it. +1
You only have to touch it.
I don't know why that didn't f'in occur to me.
…Actually the worst part is that I think I had the thought "he only had to touch it, why did he go through putting it on, is this an earlier version of 963 or something"
worst logic failure ever :|