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Please ignore the fact that the picture is a bit messed up, I'll fix that later but feedback on this would be appreciated. (Second Tab) http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/dunkleosteus

Marp.

• Fixed the image block for you.
• The number (#) parenthetical numeration isn't really used for distances, but rather scenarios in which getting a measurement wrong could be fatal, such as for drug prescriptions.
• No need for quotes around active state.
• Does this thing really need to have an "eventually, it causes death" indication? We've got tons of dangerous deadly stuff on the site already; there are better ways to get a reader's attention instead of "oh and it could KILL YOU!"
• Overall, this is kind of bland. I get that it causes diseases/death and breaks down things, but it's sort of like the standard unidentifiable goo in sci-fi shows… it's a scientific anomaly, but that's about it.
• As such, I'm more interested in why it might exist. Is it somehow alive? Did it evolve along with the earth? Is there something bigger going on that I'm just not aware of?

I feel like I'm missing something here, but I just found this kinda boring because the way I saw it, it's basically a low-curiosity substance that has some danger tacked on. Did you have an origin story planned for this?

I think its a pretty solid idea because there are ton of places you can take this base concept if you're addressing something like the nature of this compound, where it came from etc., as Zyn was saying.

It seems to me like you could really go somewhere with how you talk about the various prehistoric rock strata that the compound has been found in. Why does this compound disappear for a few million years then reappear later? Is it some kind of predator that hibernates for extremely long periods of time?

I like all the possibilities for this article, its up to you how much of what I say you use but that's just my opinion :)
Good luck