SCP Foundation

This idea does nothing for me. I can see that you're trying to go for a horror approach and trying to creep out the audience, but the cliché effects that this walkie-talkie give off (that being "thing what makes you crazy") completely ruins any kind of small slithers of originality that the article could have. An object doesn't have to kill you or make you turn into a murderous beast in order to be scary, however knowing what kind of fear you want to elicit from your audience helps (i.e. existential fear, body horror fear, fear of the unknown, etc.).

The concept of an unknown radio feed can lead into a pretty creepy article, you just need to flesh it out a little more. Who/what is on the other end of that radio? What else does it say? Why does it have the voice of a little girl? What secrets does it possess? I'm also going to mimic what Dr Raye stated above in the fact that it needs to be unique, a way to obtain that uniqueness is by adding purpose and meaning to what your saying, and a good way to do that is by considering the questions I stated earlier.

Another complaint that my associate mister Raye touched upon was the idea that this article lacks a good hook. A way of fixing this problem is to stop focusing primarily on the bland anomalous properties that it possesses, try putting what the entity is saying in one of the addendums rather than just putting it in the description. Go into the backstory of the object as well, and I don't mean an acquisition log, do little subtle hints that'll add depth to the article, but still keeping it on track, and letting the reader piece together what it means by themselves (i.e. on the back of the radio it says L.S. or it was originally manufactured by The Factory). Another good way of hooking the reader is through a picture that'll maker the audience think "Huh, I wonder what this article is all about".

The special containment procedures seem fine to me, except maybe a little over-excessive? I mean it only really fits the article in its current state and current anomalous properties but it still looks okay. One complaint however, is the lack of any other security, what about security clearance and monitoring of the object? Simple things like that need to be considered when writing the containment protocols for any SCP article. The description is also pretty solid, the fact that the paragraphs are all split up isn't really much of a bad thing, but it also doesn't really serve much of a purpose. A good scaffold to follow when writing a description is:

• First paragraph = Physical description of the object.
• Second paragraph = Anomalous properties.
• Third paragraph = Expounding on anomalous abilities.
• Fourth paragraph = Small elaboration on the history/acquisition of the anomaly.

Another problem with the description is the fact that you break the flow with the inclusion of "(1)" and "(2)" out of nowhere. You could easily just put that kind of stuff in dot points. The tone of the article feels pretty clinical so I wouldn't worry about that.