SCP Foundation

Like I said in chat, I like this. It's fucked up and horrifying and really creepy, and it reminds me of the old horror stuff on the site (specifically Dr Gears's tales). I enjoy this a lot.

I like. I'm almost tempted to suggest an AWCY twist in this. Have yourself a +1 while you mull that one over.

Nice one. I'll translate it tomorrow.

Whoo, that was exciting. First writing thing posted on the site.

I was thinking about the OG SCP when the idea about its origin story bit me. It wouldn't leave me alone, so after an hour of deliberating, I sat down at my keyboard and hammered this out. Thanks to everyone who read it in its draft stages, and everyone upvoting it now. This really means a lot to me.

It's definitely dark, but I don't feel like it does anything unique. SCP-173 origin stories have been done to the moon and back, including the "it's a piece of art" origin.

The writing here is so-so, the imagery is pretty good, but on a whole it's both too short and not original enough for me. -1

I understood that reference. +1 for a concise, entertaining bite of a story.

I like the situation in which a mother creates artwork out of a product of her child's murder and the murderer her lover.

However, everything else is disappointing. The ending treads no new ground.

Why start something novel if only to end up where everyone else has already been?

Creepy. I like it.

I didn't even realize that it was a 173 story, I just saw the creation of some item there didn't happen to be an article for. Maybe its my own bias, but I prefer the idea of building a whole possible world that doesn't strictly come down to containment procedures and addenda. There's something more enticing to me about some unknown anomalous thing sitting in an unused studio than the most famous SCP getting another backstory. The artistry of the thing feels wasted on what could have very easily built, subtly on top of the lore of the Foundation's world and its laws.

Conceptually, as a 173 background piece, it's interesting, but on a second look, I feel it's just too simply done. The brevity is working against what you're trying to do, and ultimately leaves this feeling flat.