I like this. Well done, Metaphysician. :) +1.
Date: 30 Jun 2015 22:38
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Cheerful upvote, lots here to like, lots to be intrigued by, and very nicely written.
I hope it's okay, your autopsy report measured weight in 'km' - I changed it to 'kg'.
Interview 01: 09/14/1992
Interview 02: 10/16/1991
Brassica rapa should be italicized.
Otherwise you continue to be my favorite author here.
Let me start by saying +1
I think my favorite thing about this is all the little details; the creepy dialogue, the eldritch church, the hysterical doctor, the very minute detail of having 'access granted' when you look at the docs, and especially the "Maz Hatters"
Plus it's always fun when the foundation thinks something's going to be easy and it turns out to be a little less simple.
I think the only problems I have are a few cliches, which are bound to come up in any SCP article. The "new moon" thing specifically stuck me as strange? Is it significant in some way to the religion? If not, changing it to "An infant will subsequently be found some amount of unspecified days later. The number of days has not been observed to exceed 28." might suit you. Not a huge deal though, just a personal nit-pick.
Also nice job putting the information that they take their turnips and "gangrenous limbs and tumorous growths" to the church and that they have a high-protein diest all within a few sentences of each other. Nice tip-off without necessarily spelling it out.
I have to be honest, the actual item itself, the village and its inhabitants, is not terribly interesting. I mean, there's a whole crapton of villages out of three hundred years ago on the site. Two things made me upvote, though.
First, I think I've finally figured out the whole "Adytum" thing. I mean, noticed that it keeps getting mentioned, and I went and looked it up and now maybe it'll stick in my head.
Second? Those exploration logs. Well, and the interviews. But the exploration logs especially felt like the first time I read through the Flesh. And without just being a rehash of it, too. Well done.
SCP-2133, along with -2075, -2095, 2191, -2406 (through references and implications), 2480, and 2510 (again, through references and implications) are tied together - a sort of mythos I felt the urge to build up. Been pacing myself, taking it slow - I have one that I am really excited about. Will be my last for the time being.
Adytum - a very old city and its unnumbered, terrible crimes.
I am actually working on a collection of lore for this - written from the Foundation's point of view. A sort of "this is what we know so far". Feel free to look through the draft, tab Sarkic Hub: On Sarkicism http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/metaphysician less designed to be entertaining and more a specific source material that could be used.
The villagers in this story don't know much - a relic of the old days. Just waiting to be called on.