Okay, before I just into this. The most glaring issue at the moment is (of course) the formatting. This guide clearly outlines how to format a standard SCP article, but to save you the trouble of going to the link and actually reading the guide, I've provided a handy little collapsible that shows how you do it:
**Item #:** SCP-XXXX
**Object Class:** Safe/Euclid/Keter/Thaumiel/Neutralized
**Special Containment Procedures:** blah blah blah
**Description:** blah blah blah
**Addendum:** blah blah blah
Just copy and past the above into your sandbox and you'll be good to go (psssst… don't forget the rating module ;D).
Anyway, onto the actual article itself. The idea is alright, but it could be executed a lot better. I mean sure, you have a napkin that can disable individuals from communicating to each other, presumably disabling their motor functions too. You see this could turn into an interesting bit of body horror, I mean think of the implications if your mouth went missing: people would starve to death, others would try to digest food via other means, and some may even try to cut themselves a new mouth. But at the moment you just have an effect without a proper story attached, I mean you do have a story, but it's a pretty bad one.
I mean the story and the effect have to go hand in hand, this allows for the horror of the article to really take off. Some ass-hole who wanted his wife to stop nagging and gets what's coming to him doesn't strike fear into the reader, especially how illogical the story is in hindsight. So one of the foundation personnel is walking down a street past an alleyway where coincidentally an anomalous deal is taking place. So why exactly is this dealer giving this guy a napkin in the most "inconspicuous" place possible? Do it at a cafe so that no one will suspect anything. Also, the doctor would most likely not do anything, or call the police for a suspected drug dealing. I recommend removing this discovery log entirely, as the article was doing okay up until that point.
Small little errors that I could find was mainly just tonality wise, as well as a few spelling errors (i.e. "fervor" —> "further"). If you wanna nail the tone of a typical SCP article, you have to write extremely clinically and scientifically, an example of where the tone isn't right is the first paragraph. It just jumps straight into what the anomaly does without elaborating on the actual physical description. You gotta write something like: "SCP-XXXX is similar in appearance to a standard tablecloth napkin measuring approx. ██ cm in width and height manufactured by the ███████ Corporation in the late 1990s". Another thing you do is constantly [REDACT] everything (i.e. I was in the [REDACTED] area of [REDACTED]), I mean jesus man you didn't need two right after the other, this instantly repulses a lot of readers, as it implies a lack of either research or creativity, and ultimately doesn't look aesthetically pleasing. If you are going to classify something, use black bars or something. Tone it down on the special containment procedures too, I mean you say stuff about it having to be locked in a massive room and stuff, when you could easily just lock it in a storage box and boom, threat eliminated (essentially this should be a Safe skip).
