fewer than three years before present
Why not, like, 'within past three years'.
when supervised
The use of the word 'when' here strikes me as odd.
SCP-XXXX scheduled to undergo a XXXX event, are
That comma makes this read weird.
Any deceased SCP-XXXX is
This sounds weird, doesn't SCP-XXXX refer to the group of them as a whole?
Site-22 psyche personnel
Is that the right word there?
Requests for movement outside of Site-22
Why are they being allowed to leave at all?
around the ████████ area
What full location name is that short?
behave and age normally for humans typical of their apparent ages
I'd reverse the order of 'age' and 'behave' to make this sound better.
once per year in one instance of SCP-XXXX
You don't need to say it's one of them here, since you do just after this.
XXXX event, [DATA EXPUNGED]
I feel this would be redacted, rather than expunged. I'd rather just know what was going on, tbh. Same with the ones in the incident log later on. The redaction/expungements just don't seem to add all that much, for me.
SCP-XXXX-3 displays no further anomalous
I feel 'additional' would be clearer wording, here.
that she should get
Weird wording there.
You saw tape, right?
Missing word there?
The dialogue is kind of eh, especially towards the end.