Moving up indicates a “good” dream and moving down will indicate a “nightmare”.
What if the person just felt "neutral" or at least otherwise from good/nightmare? Does the elevator not work?
Objects that exit the elevator will begin to degrade and decompose at a rate relative to the object’s mass, with the larger objects degrading faster.
I don't see why this is an effect. There's no relation to what's actually happening, and it seems tacked on to make the skip feel more dangerous than it actually is.
Amnesiacs were administered to university staff and HAZMAT staff.
Amnestics, not amnesiacs.
Interview.XXXX.01:
You really need to format this interview better in order to make it more readable. Line breaks in-between. To do that, use this:
> **Transcript of interview with Jeffry Dingdick, security guard who discovered missing university students**
>
> **Doctor Richard Fecess is the interviewing official**
>
> **Dr. Fecess:** Good evening Mr Dingdick, I’m Dr. Fecess. Can you tell me what happened? From the beginning, please.
>
> **Mr. Dingdick:** From the very beginning? From when it all started?
>
> **Dr. Fecess:** Yes, please.
Each of those ">"'s need a space right after them for it to work, remember. Also, there's a default interview template in the How to Write an SCP guide to fix the problem of all that bold at the beginning.
Incident.XXXX.02
I do not believe a Foundation employee, who dreamed of a dangerous and infectious skip, would use this SCP, knowing full well that the results could be disastrous. This reeks of incompetency.
By order of O5-3. No Foundation personnel are allowed access to SCP-XXXX under any circumstances. Possible memetic or virulent cross contamination with the effects of SCP-XXXX may lead to future casualities.
Why would a single O5 need to issue an order on this? I'd figure the site director would, and that it'd be common knowledge in the first place.
Overall, I'm not a fan. A dream elevator… could work, I guess? It's played exactly like I'd expect it to, which doesn't particularly entice me, and any test results would be very predictable.
Your dialog is also week here, as the people don't actually sound like people. For example:
Well everyone was looking for them all over the place and I always thought it would be neat if I found them.
This is quite a long sentence without a single comma, and the word choice just sounds… odd. Also this:
God it was fucked up. Going to have nightmares from that shit for the rest of my life.
It's so casual for something so horrifying and apparently so soon after it. I read out this whole interview (and the note at the end) out loud to myself. It didn't sound like something people would actually say without communicating, and the only hint at any kind of emotion comes from the "trails off" part. For all I know, these guys are talking in monotone.
