Mind if I give this one a bit of an edit?
Date: 12 Feb 2009 10:13
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Go for it. What are you changing?
Grammar, formatting, spelling, title, units of measurement, and some phrasing ("mind scrubbed?")
Also, I don't quite get the reference (having not touched a Sears anything since childhood), so can you enlighten me as to what a "Sears catalogue home" is?
A Sears Catalog Home is exactly what it says on the tin. It's basically a house you could literally mail order from Sears. I just found it to be an amusing facade for a house with the potential to end the universe.
As for the "mind scrubbing" thing, it just sounded like a cool way to get rid of a witness without "terminating" him.
Well shrink my dink, I'd figured it was just an off-hand reference.
Just about done now; what kind of energy is being detected in the final addendum? There are quite a few kinds, and just using "energy" as a catch-all is a bit of a cop out (much like a "power level," or "atomic power" during the 40's, or "carbon nanotubes").
I'm starting to like this more and more, eh.
Has a lot of themes from House of Leaves. Not knocking it just observing
Meh… Not every haunted house is a Navidson expy. I thought the premise that the house reconstructs itself controllably based on the rearrangement of particular objects inside was a nice touch.
I get the feeling this doesn't belong:
Addendum 5: After some thought, Darkblade was brought in to be struck fifty times in one second by an unknown entity calling itself Fredrington. Darkblade sought to stop the attack, but being pummeled so fast broke his concentration. Fredrington continued his assualt, wearing down the aweomse Darkblade, until, sadly, his gauntlet exploded aginst Darkblad3s skin. Scuk it! Darkblade kicked Fredrington in the jimmies, and, instead of helping this SCP, moved right on to SCP-789
What would happen if you added something? o.o;
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So, the containment procedures seem a bit excessive. If the things in the house are only active if you arrange them in a certain way, why the hell do we have a nuclear warhead underneath the site? That seems hella over the top. The Sears Catalog Home thing seemed a bit silly, as well as the Feng Shui. It could just have the object arrangement without all the obscure references. I really do like the idea of objects in a home making a whole bunch of supernatural shit going on depending on the arrangement, but it's totally killed by the expungement in the addenda. It totally takes the interesting elements out of this, and really deflates the overall effect the piece had on me.
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