And then this happened. Hopefully people enjoy it, because that's my silliness quota for one lifetime.
Date: 18 Sep 2015 01:26
Number of posts: 11
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If someone had told me three months ago "I'm going to write a comedy story that takes place in a German concentration camp," I would have been horrified. If someone had told me that Kalinin was going to write a story that takes place in a concentration camp, I would have anticipated a heart-wrenching, innocence-destroying tale appropriate to that sort of setting.
After reading your Dystopia Contest entry, I realized that you were capable of comedic writing, Kalinin, but I had no idea you had the capacity for this level of sheer absurdity. I applaud you and wish I could give more than a mere upvote for the enjoyment you've granted me.
To everyone else, please come read this story, its prequel, and the stories in its sequence. They're all wonderful.
Well. That was a wild ride from start to finish. I guess I am not alone in being surprised by this sheer volume of silliness coming from you Kal.
Anyway, I chuckled a good number of times, and thoroughly enjoyed the story. +1.
TIL Groucho Marx was an anartisit.
This is amazing, absurd, funny and just so damn cool. The visuals I got for this will forever be in my brain. I laughed out load when he said the words of power.
Hier, meine abstimmen!
I am very pleased that Freudenberger had a continued role, rather than being a single-joke character, and "I know nothing" was almost enough for an upvote on its own.
There are a couple of bits which are very visual in nature ("shave and a haircut" and most of the part with the Italian guard), which is quite difficult to get across, as the time it takes to read the descriptions of action means the accompanying dialogue ends up slightly out of sync. I wonder whether it would be improved by using a little more metaphor/simile in some of the scene-setting, so that the mental picture is slightly more vivid.
Similarly, the finale feels like it has a fairly structured series of events, but it doesn't quite have the forward momentum and escalation that marks the best farce (at least not until the bag is opened). Cutting out a few bits of the description might even be enough.
Two small things:
- There are two "slowly rose" in rapid succession in the second section, which doesn't feel deliberate.
- I wonder whether "What was happening." in the third to last section should have a question mark, as it is essentially Gruben's confusion.
As I reread the piece this morning, I think I agree with you on that last part (as well as on some of the more specific issues). The overall tone does sort of preclude the last bit. I made some changes accordingly, and I might revisit this in a few days to tighten a few things up. Thanks for the input.
What on God's green earth possessed you to write a two-part story about Groucho Marx fighting Hitler with magic? I mean, it's hilarious, but honestly!
If you cannot budge the soft heart of a beauteous creature like Günter, how will we impress the Führer when he visits?
What's the big idea? Can't a man concentrate in peace around here?
I cannot decide which of these is funnier.