I can't do a line by line right now, but after a cursory look I can give you a few tips:
Bold your section headings. This makes the separation of ideas easier, and provides visual breaks to the huge wall of text.
I would consider removing a lot of your Strikethrough text, because it pretty severely clutters up the page and makes in unnecessary difficult to read
I also suggest cutting down your test logs, as they all pretty much amount to the same thing, but take up a huge portion of page real estate.
This idea is pretty much just a generic magical item. It brings stuff to life, and that's about it. It needs more backstory or less bland effects to really be a unique and successful skip.