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So this is Procreation. Started as a dream I had after a bad night of wings, then kind of took on a life of its own.
Many thanks to everybody who read through this in chat, and thanks specifically to Metaphysician and Faminepulse for inspiration.
As always, your comments, critiques, and criticisms are always welcome!
Weird. Did I somehow miss this one? I guess I did! Looks good!
The only word that comes to mind after reading this:
Wow
And with that, I grant this mightily ambitious piece of art an upvote.
Yea, though I walk through the lowest rated pages, I will fear no coldpost: for thou art with me SCP Wiki; thy mods and thy staff they comfort me.- Proxymoron
This is great, and I upvoted accordingly, but the SR-71 was a reconnaissance aircraft and had no offensive capabilities.
Shows what I know. Will update accordingly. Many thanks!
Sorry to continue to rain on parades, but the F111B never left the testing phase, was replaced by the F-14, and was only operated (and only intended for) the US Navy.
While the first F-14 flew in 1970, it wasn't deployed by the Navy until '74; it's not impossible that there happened to be a squadron of F-111Bs available in 1971, as they weren't completely decommissioned until the F-14s came oneline.
As far as I know, the F-111B was never produced or deployed. Certainly there were never any USAF squadrons. The Air Force doesn't operate carrier-based aircraft.
ETA:
The F-111B was not ordered into production and the F-111B prototypes were used for testing before being retired.
So, AFAICT, a combat squadron (especially an Air Force squadron) of a non-production prototype (for the Navy) is basically impossible.
The Air Force neither had nor wanted the F-111B; they were more than happy with the F-111 base model, which was never required to be a tactical fighter as well as a bomber. In fact, the strike on Libya in 1986 was carried out by F-111s bolstered by F-16s.
On the other hand, was there a wing of Navy F-4s deployed anywhere near LA in '71, or were they all over near Vietnam at the time? Someone might have ordered the strike with the prototype F-111Bs because that was what they had at the time - or they weren't a failure after all, but were quietly commandeered by the Foundation while the development of F-14s was encouraged in their stead… ;-)
So the Foundation secretly transferred a handful of test aircraft (only seven were ever built) from the Navy to the Air Force and had them armed and made combat ready in order for the UIU to use them to quickly respond to the Tango Tango incident? Wouldn't just letting the Air Force use the F-111A (or - E), which the USAF already had ready to go at the time? Is there some numerological reason for the -B that I am missing here? Or is it possible that the author doesn't know as much about 1970s combat aircraft as we do? Occam's Razor says the latter is more likely.
ETA: I'm saying that this:
UIU Central ordered US Air Force F-111B jets to be scrambled and eliminate the ships.
Ought to be "F-111A jets" (or "F-111E jets" or maybe even -Ds not sure if there were operational squadrons yet). Rather than any need for a contrived reason for the Air Force to be flying non-production Naval prototypes on a fast reaction combat sortie.
All of the above is ignoring the apparent ability of a part of the FBI (a civilian law enforcement agency) to order a military strike against a civillian target, /in American waters/. It is difficult to convey just how incredibly illegal and improbable this chain of events is.
Yeah, should probably be "UIU convinced president Nixon to order…"
Something tells me that the tankers were heading to the Flesh that Hates.
I think it's no coincidence that it's numbered SCP-2610
Well, this is disturbing on multiple levels. I thoroughly admire the amount of work that was put into this. Well done.
I have a few corrections to suggest below, but there is one major concern I have with what is generally a very well written story: why is this an SCP document?
There is (presumed to be) no anomaly remaining to be contained, but unlike most Neutralized SCPs, in this case there was never an anomaly in containment. There was never a need for the Foundation to prepare Special Containment Procedures for the Colony, because the Foundation only ever found out about them in the last few days before they ceased to exist (as far as the Foundation is willing to state). It's not clear to me why this would have been put in the SCP database. This is an incident report, with some accompanying backstory from UIU records, but I'm not sure it should be an SCP document as an in-universe matter.
SCP-2610-A, -B, -C, and -D were the siblings Simeon, Armond, Jorge, and Yvette Avakian
I think you should swap the order of Jorge and Yvette's names, as both photos of young women are referred to as -C.
sharply stunted mental faculties
Suggest something like "severely underdeveloped mental faculties", as "sharply stunted" doesn't quite feel in-tone.
Addendum 2610-1
All of the other addenda have a period before the designation (eg "Addendum 2610.2"). Also, some of the addenda have italicised notes explaining their provenance, but not this one - is this Foundation text, and the rest UIU? There wasn't much difference in the tone to distinguish them.
has, in experience, turned
I'm never sure with journal extracts whether the "errors" are deliberate or not, but I'll comment on them just in case. "with experience" would be the more common construction.
were I to find myself together with another conscious
"consciousness"
light shined through the cracks
"shone"
I wrote it nonetheless;
Suggest a colon at the end of the line.
suffering."
I don't think you need the closing quotation marks, as the journal excerpt doesn't open with one.
the vehicle was recovered and identified as belonging to A. Avakian, a dockhand from Boston whose fingerprints were recognized as also being from the previous scene
I see on a second read that you've laid the groundwork for this, but it didn't link up for me the first time through, especially having just read that no fingerprints from the first scene were recognized.
Perhaps something like: "the vehicle was recovered and identified as registered to A. Avakian through his employer, a shipping company in Boston. Mr Avakian's employment records included fingerprints, which were matched to some of the unidentified prints from the previous scene".
They're getting them on the line right now, Cooper
This transcript has references to "Cooper", but the relevant agent's name is given as "Agent Carter". Unless that's a nicknaming convention with which I'm unfamiliar, I suspect it might be an oversight.
Also, I wonder how important recognising -B is in the transcript. In a room of 400 naked people that would be hard enough, but with the distraction of the Colony's physiology, I struggle to believe that Agent Carter could pick -B in a line-up.
Agent Designation: Killroy
Is the double-l deliberate?
the assailants had boarded the train and were en route to the west coast
If the train was hijacked on the east coast, how did anyone know their final destination. "en route west" might be more realistic for the state of information at the time.
Attempts were made to halt the vehicle using explosives, but were similarly fruitless, as SCP-2610-E instances would quickly throw their bodies on top of any incendiary placed on the track
How would that stop the track itself from being damaged? And couldn't the track be destroyed miles in advance of the train's path? I wonder whether it's better for the UIU to decide early on (after the Kentucky incident) that it's safer to let the trains get through (to avoid civilian casualties from derailment and letting the Colony loose in a mid-west town) and set up a trap on the coast, once they intuit where the trains are headed. In fact, I wonder whether it's then better for the UIU to let the Colony get onto the boats, and have the F-111 bombers as their main plan, rather than a last-ditch idea.
There is (presumed to be) no anomaly remaining to be contained
From my reading, there is a whole ark that made it out unscathed that went…somewhere.
You're not wrong. In my eyes, it's more of a record keeping collaborative effort kind of thing, so the Foundation will have files really available if necessary.
Lot of good catches, though. I'll go through and make those edits.
Corrupting tears? Sounds like the things from the other side of 093. Maybe they were this realities version, only they got killed/joined 610?
I see this really big Mekhane vs. the flesh canon kind of spreading itself out, with mekhane having more weapons and the flesh getting help from the Karcist and other cultists who make/create/become flesh monsters, and a new war coming up soon.
Hmm… what if 427 was a sort of tool by the Flesh to heal his followers and corrupt people, and 914 made a copy of the real one?
Or He's trying to come through the passage from the world accessible through 093, and is using the Flesh as a shortcut to making the Unclean?
Jesus fucking Christ. This is horrifying.
And if the whole world is crashing down… fall through space out of mind with me.
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