a description of what the skip does to the people in the glass case (it cooks them, kind of like a microwave), which I left out figuring that it would hopefully be clear from context, and the name of the skip.
Not everyone reads the name of an SCP before reading it, and the names aren't considered official in-universe, but rather nicknames used casually by those with clearance (since we've got The Town That Got Fucked By Bears and cthulu f'UCK OFF!! in the mix).
The idea I'm going for is that the reader is meant to think 'oh, it's just a mind-control thing that makes you kill your friends,' until the reveal that there's no mind control or anything like that at work, and the deaths could have been prevented
Yeah, I didn't get any of this, especially given that I was just constantly wondering why all this happens. The Saw franchise had a revenge plotline running (if I remember correctly) but this sort of 'lol pressure cook peoples!' thing just… seemed kind of random.
the deaths could have been prevented if the subjects had held out just that little bit longer. And then you start to think…how long could I have held out?
Dunno if I would have noticed that. The entire article seemed to have the inevitability of the standard "thing that kills you" narrative structure; we've got tons of dangerous things on the mainsite, but not very many that hint at why these things are or need to be dangerous.
What's the bigger picture here?