Tab is 'Tale 1'.
Short tales are my jam. Here we go:
- The "8:00 AM- 4:00 PM." start off is a little shaky. My initial thought was "that hyphen should have a space between it and AM, right?" Also, since apparently this is a narration and I'm not sure how people necessarily pronounce hyphens in their head, why not "8:00 AM to 4:00 PM"?
- The section ""SCP-106 has breached containment. I repeat, SCP-106 has breached containment." Not knowing the severity of the situation, Hector went about his business." kind of broke my suspension of disbelief. If there are any low-level staff in a site, you'd think the intercom announcer would say something that would keep them safe, like "evacuate immediately" or "proceed to sheltered area", rather than just assuming people with no knowledge of SCP-106 would know what to do.
- Also, given that SCP-106's containment has been revised so often and its current containment is crazy complicated, you'd think that staff on-site would have acknowledged how danger-prone it is and have measures in place to ensure that personnel know what to do in the event of a breach. (Unless this is taking place during a time when 106 wasn't well-contained? In which case, maybe provide some more context?)
- The ending, as a result, has a softened impact. It seems like a gross oversight on the Foundation intercom announcer's part that led to the loss of the janitor, and so I'm having some trouble sympathizing with him when he's basically a victim of, well, stupidity. That intercom announcer cost the Foundation a useful personnel member and necessitated that resources (no matter how small, admittedly) be spent to seek and acquire a replacement.
I feel like the concept of "how easy it is to lose and replace a low-level Foundation maintenance staff member" would make for an interesting tale made of different vignettes, but the current tale doesn't quite hold to my headcanon of how the Foundation operates.