This is for my SCP in progress. Do I need to add more? Please let me know. Any feedback is appreciated.
http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/flammingidiot
I'm not an expert on critiquing, but here's what I got:
First, you have to bold your Item #, Object Class, Special Containment Procedures, and Description headings. If you don't know how, do it like this: add two *s before and after your phrase, so that SAMPLE TEXT + ** ** = SAMPLE TEXT
Its a rule here that we gotta use metric units, not customary Heck, there's even a -J page on it!
incase needed
should (probably) be
in case it is needed
should be
You should refer to the door's entities as SCP-XXXX-1
place in time. Sometimes opening to otherworldly beings.
Add a comma after "time"
This paragraph is clunky and sort of confusing. First; grammar and tone.
The paragraph should sound like this:
sometimes opening to seemingly extradimensional entities. Witnesses report opening SCP-XXXX to see a humanoid figure in black clothing wearing a 'Tragedy' opera mask. When the entity was asked "What are you?" or any similar question, it responded with saying: "You are not invited to the party." following this, SCP-XXXX closed itself, pushing the class D and senior researcherany witnesses outside of itself.
Next, you said "beings", which must mean that there are more than Mr. Mask Man. Maybe you could add a log of all the entities that emerged to spice the article up a bit?
Above all: This article is very, well, used. There are plenty of openings-up-to-other-dimensions Scips out there. Unless you add something to make this stand out from the rest of the crowd, this will be swiftly downvoted.
I probably didn't reach all of the problems, so just take this article with a grain of salt and wait for more reliable critiques. Wish you luck!
Thanks alot!
Testing If this is bold, then hot diggity
Honestly, this helped me alot! Thank you very much, try to check in occasionally if you can. I like how you think!
I've revised the post and am working on ideas for other beings that exit. I hope the fact other forms of sentient life can exit and possibly do considerable damage to the facility adds a spin to it. Any comments or suggestions help.
fixed some formatting errors. Like I said, the tone of this is still off, wait for actual members of the critique team to see this and follow their requests.