So, I'm kinda forced to repost here. My apologies, BTW, if this is considered a doublepost.
So, I submitted it here a week ago, maybe a little longer, and received a damn fine critique by dankaar, who then suggested I put it to the forum crit team chat or the site19 chat.
Well, I kinda forgot how to IRC for whatever reason, so I can't register a nick to access site19, and every time I go into the Crit Team Chat, it's idle for an hour or more. I'm sure, this is no fault of their own, they all have lives, so it's really no big deal.
So, I figure, my best bet is to toss it back into this mix and see what shakes out of it.
I thank you guys again in advance for the advice, and again thank Dankaar for the initial critique [which I used to the best of my ability].
Generally, I'd lock this thread, but since only one person responded to the previous thread, I'll just link the old one here. In the future, please try to stick to one thread per draft. If you're having trouble getting further replies on a thread and you can't access the chat, message a staff member and ask them for feedback, or if they can direct chat attention to the thread. ~Zyn
Reviewers, previous feedback was given here: http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/t-1758615/first-draft-critique-feedback-please