So, this is generally well written. The problems I have with it, though, relate mostly to the effects when the scip is consumed. They just aren't all that original, particularly the killing spree. You're going down a well-worn path with this; I would suggest doing more bizzare or subtle effects to make this stand out from established articles. Right now, this feels somewhat like SCP-370.
Also, I'm not sure where that update regarding the possibility of further memetic effects in coming from. There's nothing in the description which at any point suggests people are anomalously affected by already affected individuals, so I don't see the point in mentioning this. This links to the object class; this is clearly a safe, as it could be stored in a box and left to gather dust without any real chance of containment breach. No need for the Foundation to consider changing this as it stands.
Also, probably best to omit the polygraph test. As far as I'm aware, the polygraph is not necessarily a reliable method of detecting lies, it is merely a reliable method of measuring blood pressure, skin conductivity, respiration, and pulse (Polygraph).
Thanks. I guess the whole killing spree thing has been done before. I'm just having trouble coming up with what this thing does when placed in water. I've tried absolutely random effects and this. Nothing seems to work
What I try to do is come up with a simple but clear idea, a core concept. Something that can be described in a few words or a sentence at most, and that I find interesting. Then develop everything around that, focusing on some aspect of the idea.
You have your idea: some anomalous water capsules. Now try and come up with something that these water capsules do that you find interesting rather than what you think would most elicit a reaction from the reader (this comes later, during the execution). Maybe the capsules don't affect humans at all, but instead have anomalous effects on animals or common household items? Or maybe the capsules exclusively affect water in some weird way. You already have an object which is in many ways a household item (or could pass off as such); you could use this fact to shape the skip.
I'm just having trouble coming up with what this thing does when placed in water. I've tried absolutely random effects and this. Nothing seems to work
To quote vezaz, "Get away from "type of object" or "sort of creature" and instead start thinking about stories you want to tell. Start looking for moments in your everyday life that give you pause, that are unusual, or that make you go off into a daydream. Then think about bringing the reader to that same moment."
The problem with attempting to think up a concept that at its core is "[thing] that does [effect]" is that when we've got thousands of articles on the site, it's always possible that there's another [different thing] that does [pretty much same effect].
Think about how you want a reader to respond emotionally to your work, or what kind of thoughts you want them to be having after they've read the article. Whether it's a new perspective of the world or a small detail that people don't often consider, giving the reader something to reflect on can be a stronger narrative than "here's some info about a thing".