Decided to dust off an old draft I had lying around and refurbish it for the contest. Hope you like it.
Date: 22 Sep 2016 13:25
Number of posts: 14
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I liked the idea of a D-class getting broken down by their various body systems, and each of those systems becoming its own entity. I even liked that you gave each system a differing version of the originals personality. However, we eventually get to the twist with the skin, and the skeleton, and it just fell flat for me.
Would you say that the twist came out of nowhere and was all bone but no meat?… I'm sorry for that pun
Edit: Disregard what I said after this, as I don't think I'm supposed to post comments of that vein.
We change a lot over time, but there's always a little of our old selves in us. Never forget your old self, they're one of the most important parts of you.
Why'd it have to be Sarkicism? Why couldn't the beings from beyond exist on their own? Why does everyone feel like their body horror SCP isn't complete unless it references some Karcist or Klavigar or Koka-kola with several K's in the name?
It doesn't actually reference Sarkicism anywhere (at least not that I can find). Could be that these are just unaffiliated beings from beyond, one of which happens to ramble about it's apotheosis (a common goal for lesser eldritch entities, from what I'm given to understand)
Edit: Oh, there. I stand by my original statement while adding "ha-ha alternate universe sarkicist got screwed over." XD
I like this a lot. My only issue, which is more of a nitpick, is the specification for the humidity level of the containment area. I didn't see any reason in the containment procedures or the description to merit its inclusion. Unless I completely missed it, in which case feel free to point it out.
You get a +1 from me regardless.
I was wavering between a neutral vote and a downvote at the point of the interview with the muscles; the interview was kind of reminiscent of the typical angry D-Class what doesn't like being subject to crimes against humanity, but this thing is so goddamn weird that my interest was held. Then the skeleton interview came, and I was simultaneously glad to see it free of internet memes and also pointing to something deeper going on here. Then the skin interview hit, and I was off the proverbial hook.
I could see this working with some changes to it, and I'm willing to roll with your initial premise, but I found the conclusion kind of a let down, given the buildup.
I could also have done without the implied Sarkic connection, and I'm not sure why Dr. McGann suddenly decides to use its name in the -6 interview when they were against it in the -3 interview, but the article still charmed me enough to upvote.