I'ts still in drafting, and there is still a lot more to write on it, but lemme know what you guys think so far
So what is this, and what do you want me to crit?
It is about an anomolous vault found beneath a destroyred building, that warps space and time when the door is open. The door automatically opens and shuts at intervals, and it is an UMO, (unmoveable object).
I want critique on the amount of excess information I give. At the moment, there are quite a few loose ends, and unrefferenced material, but the stories and interviews I am going to write in will make the information that is currently there relevant. Like the brown pants comment, and the Q event "don't broadcast". I plan on adding story for those.
cant delete :(
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