- Parenthetical Enumeration: while not technically a bad thing, having numbers written out as "[number] (#)" can attract downvotes as it can interrupt the flow of the article, and is generally superfluous in any situation where precise numberss are not essential (basically, anything outside of law or medicine).
- Description in the Procedures: Long story short, we don't need to know why the procedures are like that. If the reason for the procedures to be the way it is isn't clear from the description, then you may have overthought (or underthought) the procedures.
- Questiobable Procedures: Why not just keep the bird in a birdcage? Problem solved.
- Questional Test Log: Considering that the Foundation already knew what the SCP normally does if it can't see the bird, it's completely unprofessional for them to have not designed the experiment in a way to minimize a rampage (have the bird nearby). If they could not have done so, then the experiment should never have been carried out in the first place. The Foundation's primary goal is to keep shit locked up. If it can be reasonably expected that an experiment might end up causing a containment breach based on what is already known about a SCP and no steps are taken to minimize that scenario, then it is fundimentally a bad experiment and shouldn't be carried out.
- Thing What Kills You: at the end, this is what the SCP is. It exists to stare at a bird and kills you if it can't. There's no real substance to this SCP beyond that.
Big issue is that your SCP lacks any real significance to it. As stated up above, it exists only to stare at the bird and kill you if it can't. It's got about as much depth as a poster of [insert name of a particularly shallow celebrity here].
Remember, most modern successful SCPs typically aren't just reports on objects, but stories in the form of reports on objects. They grant insight into the SCP itself, or how it impacts the world and what that says about the Foundationverse.
To understand what I mean, I suggest you read more Series II and III articles, and focus not on what the object is, but what happens over the course of the article.