http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/doctorrichtofen IT IS IN THERE, please give me critique, I NEED it.
I'm not sure how I feel about the idea itself. I'd probably no-vote with the current execution, but I'm in that weird ambivalent state where I'm not sure if any suggestion would improve or worsen the article.
What I can tell you is that you need to fix your tone and sentence structure. Clinical Tone Declassified is a good guide to scientific tone. I know it's a bit of a read, but it's well worth it. You can even keep it open in a neighboring tab while you're writing, to check your work periodically. That's what I do.
Thank you for the tone tips, you just saved me from a lot of things with that link, seriously.
And yeah, i have been getting a lot of different opinions about it, and I still don't know what to do