Look, I'm going to be real honest with you. Go and read a bunch of Series Three SCPs, read the Guides (especially Clinical Tone Declassified), and then go back to this draft and edit it heavily with what you've learned about site standards and expectations in mind.
I'm glad you put it in the draft forums first, because you've made a lot of newbie mistakes which can be fixed by doing your reading and going back to the draft and editing. Good luck!
Thanks for your opinion, can you please tell me something about my NEW idea ? :3
Right now it's just a flying carnivore deer. There's no story or substance here. 1000 was successful primarily because of the well-written story behind it. If the article had simply been "Here's Bigfoot written in the SCP format, nothing changed" it would not have worked so well.
Also, 30 minutes usually isn't nearly enough time to produce a well-written, quality SCP. Don't be discouraged if it takes weeks or even months to shape and perfect an idea.
Thankks for your opinion. But I would be happy if you would tell me something about my masterpiece I´m working on this for more than week continuously…
http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/oblivion
Uh, you only need one sandbox. There's code on the front page of the sandbox site you can use to add extra tabs for each of your ideas.
Now then, on to the gramophone. It's a gramophone and a record. When used together they give someone amnesia. That's it. There's a couple of spelling/grammar issues, and the fact that the Foundation doesn't test items on civilians (that's what the D-class are for) and they especially avoid purposefully using SCP's on civilians.
But the big question is *why?* To quote Zyn, "Think about this thing's story. What happened to it that brought it to where it is now? Does it have a purpose, a meaning, a reason to exist as it is?"