As originally posted in the Brainstorming Forum, I've got a spooky monster and am trying to get the emotional discomfort better developed. Specifically looking to dial up the disconnect between how human and warm we have to treat (it to its face) and how inhuman it really is, but other advice is of course welcomed. I'm sure I made SPAG errors as well, of course.
Yeah, those reasons are pretty solid. I see why you don't want to do that. I guess I didn't pick up on it from the article so I suppose my feedback would be that you need to put more in about what happens during a dissasociation event and how bad it is.
Wow, I can't believe I missed the Lovecraft reference. That was an easy one.
Updates made, biopsy attempt added; tried to make this thing more dangerous in a visceral way but don't want to make it all too complicated. I still feel like it's missing some spark but I'm not good enough to see what that could be.