Hmm… wall o text. Thanks for that. We actually have a pastebin account set up specifically to prevent people from posting entire articles in the forum, so use that next time, kay?
That said, fucking fantastic. This is excellent.
Great job. This is exemplary. Still, if you're going to post it on the site, why not go ahead and post it on its own page? Well, if you're looking for advice, here it is: I feel the dialogue here is a little artificial. The Doctor never slips from his composure (and this is not implausible), but the Class D personnel seem almost obliged to pepper their speech with expletives. This does not detract, however, from the quality of the article. A simple concept, with enough care, can become great.
I'm.. sorry, Dr. Bright. I asked in the chat where I could post it where it would remain formatted, and they suggested here.
I cannot post it on its own page because that function is currently disabled. I will keep my shit to myself from now on.
During the great edit, only admins can create new pages (I think), so if you want a sandbox of your very own, you'll have to ask one of them for help.