"SCP-2715 is contained at Site-36 and is not to be moved due to risks in it corroding vehicle
transporting SCP-2715."
I find that the wording for this sentence is fairly awkward. I'd have it read something more akin to
"SCP-XXXX is to be contained at Site-36 and is not to be moved" We'll find out why it shouldn't be moved later in the Description section.
"If SCP-2715-2 is near finished with corroding SCP-2715-1 allowing SCP-2715-2 to be exposed to the outside world
which will happen in an estimated amount of time of ██ years then personnel are to as quickly as possible take
SCP-2715 out of containment and leave it in an isolated location at least 3 Km from any human life forms.
Away from any excess amounts of SCP-2715-1."
You have a paragraph which consists of one run on sentence and then an incomplete sentence. Not only is this
sore on the eyes, it's also not clinical in tonality.
The addenda should be test logs.
"After 2 minutes had past…" should read "passed".
"Had great pain…" isn't very clinical in its tone. I'd write it out as "reported to have been experiencing extreme discomfort…"
"She was checked by a doctor…" is very vague, and again not very clinical.
"…that blocks any type of energy or ray passing through it including but not limited to gravity…
(and the) Laws of Physics." This is very vague and not very clinical in tone. I would recommend doing a bit more research on electromagnetism and how that works before adding something like this to an article. For example, do thermodynamics not take effect in this sort of instance? Would this scip not automatically phase through anything due to electrons not repelling eachother? If no physics took effect, this literally would not exist.
I won't nitpick anymore than this. Overall, this scip in its nature just doesn't seem to fit in the foundation universe. A lot of its abilites seem to have nothing to do with one another. I'd recommend heavily revising it. There are also a lot of good resources in the site pertaining to how to write a scip, keeping your toneclinical and what tropes to avoid when writing a scip.
