Ehhh. I saw the title and it reminded me of Judgmental Turtle. I saw this sentence:
he instead pulled The Tower, resulting in the collapse of that section of Site ██ and [REDACTED] deaths.
And was reminded of the sloughs of "YOU CANNOT FIGHT FATE, ROCKS FALL, EVERYONE DIES" SCP drafts I've seen before. Suffice to say, I'm pretty hesitant on the concept.
Some general things:
- I'm not sure about the use of the word "pristine" to describe the cards. Doesn't seem really scientific, since different people have different conceptualizations of that word (in my case, I think of "pristine" as in the cards have never been unwrapped or handled by anyone, other people might just think "shiny and new")
- Don't refer to an individual as a "subject" unless you've established the experimental protocol they're being subjected to. If there's no research design or observation ongoing, they're not a subject of anything and shouldn't be called such.
- You've got some casual language like this sentence "It is theorized that the subject's desires and reason for pulling a card may play into what card appears." the phrase "may play into" is something more common in colloquial conversations than professional writing.
I was admittedly a bit bummed that the effects were so… predictable? I've heard that the Death card can indicate change approaching or a shift in one's life. Having it just cause cardiac arrest felt like a total cop-out to me. You lost the mysticism of the cards when you just go so literal.
Maybe you can make this into a tale and have some twist on the cards based on actual tarot readings, and have a story about the Foundation trying to puzzle out some bigger picture from these things. Right now, it's just a thing that does a random thing, essentially a generic magic object. Who owned these cards first? Why do they exist? Were they special to anyone/anything before they became thing #9001 the Foundation locked up?