A sandbox should have the name of the author in the URL, so people can tell to whom the page belongs. Right now, it looks like the page belongs to someone with the wikidot username "2449".
oh, and the vote counter says I need to ask permission to activate it (I know because a friend tried to vote) so if possible could it be activated so I can gauge a response from a wider audience? if not, nevermind.
Rating modules are disabled on the sandbox, because works-in-progress are kept there. We don't need unsolicited votes on test pages and things that aren't finished.
In regards to your draft…
- Generally, the number (#) numeration is used for extreme precision measurements that can be fatal if misinterpreted, like drug prescriptions. You don't need to do that with simple whole numbers.
- I'm pretty sure this chair thing is Safe. No one goes near it and nothing happens, right?
- "As of addendum SCP-XXXX-A3" doesn't make sense, since "addendum SCP-XXXX-A3" is not a time. "As of the writing of addendum SCP-XXXX-A3" would make more sense, but technically you don't really need to add that. Just tell people what the instructions are. We don't need to know which year a new part was manufactured when we put together an IKEA bookshelf.
- If you need to specify measurements, it's not a "generic" containment unit. Why those measurements, anyway? What about 5 x 7 x 3?
- Don't use all-caps for emphasis, it looks unprofessional.
- Don't use all-caps and bold for emphasis, it looks unprofessional.
- O5 Command, not 05, but I don't think they'd bother with this thing. The Councilmembers have more important things to think about. Have the Site Director or project head take this thing.
- As such, requiring three Councilmembers to weigh in is overkill.
- IMMEDIATE TERMINATION actually made me laugh. It looks silly. Why termination, anyway? Isn't that a waste of hard-to-replace Foundation staff?
- Try to establish what the thing is and does at the start of the description, rather than distracting your audience with backstory before they even know what the object you're discussing is.
- Avoid using words in "scare quotes". In-universe, it's a professional researcher writing the thing; they'd know the correct terminology to use.
- Please add spaces between your paragraphs.
- I lost interest in reading after seeing "Adendmum". The piece overall just looks really sloppy to me—consider reading the work out loud and making fixes for excessive wordiness as you go through, so when you bring it to reviewers, it looks like a polished work.
I dunno. I'm not entirely sure what this thing's primary anomaly is, let alone why there are so many logs.
Consider getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you make the idea more interesting and give you some advice on structuring the eventual article for smoothness of reading and narrative.