Is that first picture a screencap from a video game?
Date: 04 Nov 2016 16:01
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No, it isn't. Its an edited photograph of a submarine on display in a museum.
Oh, I see. I saw the yellow gaseous stuff and the lens flare and immediately assumed it was from a game. Thank you for correcting me!
Not as much as your sad, illiterate attempt at conveying your dissatisfaction with this article. How about you try being a constructive member of this site instead?
this comment thread sucks 🙃
I feel like I'm getting deja-vu
No i feel like Im getting deja-vu
There's a reference to 'Addendum XXXX-C' at the end of the description.
I like it enough to upvote it.
But… I don't like the overdone exposition at the end. It's too "in your face" - you shouldn't have to spell it out, you should (imho) let the article tell the story.
Maybe have another addendum where another -2 instance locates a diamond deposit and then the process starts again, with maybe that -2 instance becoming a -1 in its own right? Just a thought.
PS is this your first scip? Good job.
That is an idea! I was thinking that that last statement by the professor was a little over-the-top myself… I'll get to work on a new addendum soon, thank you for the feedback :)
P.s: No, this certainly is not my first SCP XD There've been ones in the past… Not so successful!
I have the same reservations concerning the endnote, which cinched my downvote. Far, far to blatant. I feel this would have ended stronger at the -B addendum, or, alternatively, toughen up -C with something less…direct?
This is great. I wonder how anyone manage to build such intriguing, complex but absorbable story. How many work-hours does it take you to finish this whole SCP?
That's high praise, thanks :D Overall, it took a good few months to finish it, but keep in mind that I was coming back and forth to it. I don't know if it's completely perfect yet, but I have gone through about five or six drafts XD
I enjoyed this article, but I feel there are two places to clean up.
First, the experiment logs drag on for awhile. Maybe drop the one with the tree? I understand you're going for a build up of its aggression, but after awhile I caught myself skimming rather than reading.
Second, the last bit about the -1 running out of carbon was pretty poorly done. It was almost enough to illicit a downvote from me. I'd rather see a dispassionate note about mineral depletion than some random researcher showing up and saying, "Uh-oh folks! This thing be scary!" It kicked me right out of the narrative and brought my plus one to a novote.
so why did they toss someone's dog in there
It wasn't "someone's", it was either a lab specimen or stay/abandoned. They were testing to see what kind of sources the object could collect carbon from. Dogs are made of carbon. So are people. They were trying to figure out whether or not it was dangerous to living things.
I like this article, but the testing logs make the lead researcher seem daft. After breaking containment twice in a row, testing probably should have stopped. Instead, they did one more that resulted in massive casualties. Then the only reason it didn't result in more damage is because it stopped working. That whole block comes off a little too "FOR SCIENCE" to me.