http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/spectraldragon
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http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/spectraldragon
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What is the underlying narritive?
Even further what is the anomaly? Does it just grow on all surfaces?
This needs something more interesting added to it because at the moment i can't even see how you would make this better.
Is this you first attempt at a scip? If it is then how did you get your high karma?
Edit: I have never seen this kol-format before.
I do agree on the fact that the article is lacking in some ways.
But, c'mon, don't bring a user's "karma" into this. Even if you're not trying to belittle OP, do not take in account a user's karma into his or her's writing capabilities or site experience. Karma is only a way to measure a user's activeness on Wikidot and that does not equate to anything at all.
SpectralDragon, as for your draft, it is simply too short. I suggest you add more to this draft, such as a more complete description of your scip's effects. I reads to me like a generic magic plant(?) and I don't really see any solid connections to the Koi-format page.
It wasn't meant to be an insult to their writing capability, i just wondered where it was from.
I am sorry nevertheless.
I'll work on making it longer and strengthening the connections. Thank you for your feedback, Dr Nikolaus, it was helpful!
Third attempt, actually (fourth if you count the other one currently languishing in my drafts). I've got an author page, you could have checked to see if I had one and figured this out for yourself. But my karma really doesn't have anything to do with this.
Overall: I don't really have much to say about this, 4/10 and would probably not vote as is/downvote. It's kind of just "meh" and lacking anything I find particularly compelling. Adding details and narrative, etc would be a step in the right direction. The carp bit felt rather shoehorned in, and it was odd that the ponds weren't mentioned in the containment procedures at all.
Some questions to help fuel thoughts:
Safe
I know this is controversial, but I'm of the opinion that any containment that requires routine maintenance isn't Safe. Obviously that's not a consensus, and you are free to ignore this, but I thought I should mention it.
with all surfaces made of pure cobalt.
Metallic cobalt is brittle, I'm not sure you can even effectively use it structurally. In the real-world cobalt is usually alloyed. I'm also not sure what the cobalt is doing there. It isn't mentioned again in your draft, so I don't see anything that says this weed wouldn't grow on it.
but it can survive on materials which are completely devoid of nutrients by growing on dead instances of itself.
This violates thermodynamics; I don't know if that's intentional, though.
By the time containment efforts began, it had been released into the wild in several locales.
This doesn't seem like a Safe anomaly, then (or even really contained). Duckweeds grow very fast and some duckweeds already are a problematic invasive organism in environments with abnormally elevated nutrients, super-duckweed that can grow anywhere (while ignoring entropy) looks like an ecological catastrophe to me.
Research Assistant Lynzil captured footage of the local Prussian carp scraping off SCP-XXXX infested scales and retreating to safe water to begin the healing process. It is unclear if this is a learned behavior or a sign of possible anomalous activity.
I feel like this connects to your building koi-mythos, but I'm not really getting the significance here. Although I do like the use of a memetic anomaly in non-humans!
Overall, I don't think this is really doing much for me that stands out. The more interesting implications are simply ignored or glossed over, and what is here doesn't really have a hook that is more compelling than what's missing (which makes me wonder if there's some kind of clever elision here where I'm meant to draw some conclusion from what's absent, but if there is I'm too dense).