First off the "Item #:", "Object Class:", "Special Containment Procedures:" and "Description:" need to be bolded.
"safe" should be capitalized, and usually in the sandbox people will use 'SCP-XXXX" instead of SCP-#### but that's just personal preference.
to be kept in a room cell furnished with furniture and items
whats a room cell? what items?
Subject is allowed to freely wander the facility .
why? in the description it says that he can make someone cease all brain activity, this would bump up the item class at least up to Euclid, but more about that later.
with a pair of welding goggles both are not to be removed
I can understand the tracking device but not the welding goggles, this is never explained
subject is not allowed alcahol under any circumstances
SCPs aren't allowed to have alcohol period, unless its necessary to keep a safe containment. Also there's no need to go into detail about what isn't needed.
Violence is not to be used against SCP-###
The ethics community usually assures this unless the SCP is a threat to personnel or acts out. The Foundation isn't cruel but if an SCP lashes out at Foundation Personnel it will be smacked down as to deter repeat offences. It's another detail that doesn't need to be included since it usually goes without saying.
SCP-### claims to be kept on site-47 he is kept on site -17
Also not needed and not explained.
appears to be researcher.M-Mulyk
Grammar mistakes. Is M its first name or did it stutter? Is it actually Researcher Mulyk or does it only look like him? was he a researcher for the foundation or for some other company?
pale white male
Is that just a description of what he looks like or is that his ethnicity? Is it a Caucasian male? Clinically its ethnicity wouldn't be described as "white".
Those aren't nearly alike, are they brown or orange? or both? do they change? is one colored differently than the other?
tattoos the most notiscible is across his chest
What does the Tattoo look like? What does his demise, failure escape and "the place he was" have anything to do with it? What even is "the place he was"?
Subject does need to eat and drink instead inhales insence and smokes herbal cigarettes this somehow feeds it.
Not entirely sure how this thing can even eat considering that it doesn't have intestines, and assuming it still has lungs smoking should hurt it like it does any other entity, right? Unless there's an explanation about how this works it just seems very half baked.
though it has been described as being bored somewhat mechanical and from time to time angry in its speech.
I think this is detailing how its speech pattern behaves but it reads really awkwardly and I had to reread it 4 times to try to understand what was being said.
It is usualy helpful, and enjoys helping personel
Except when it speaks angrily and ceases peoples brain activity I assume?
and seems to have a photografic memory
Does it or does it not have a photographic memory? That's easily testable.
producing a low humming sound during this time if eye contact is made with scp-#### the person will sease all brain activity
This, in every case it happens, should kill people. This anomaly would make people instantaneously go brain dead. Is this why the welding goggles are needed? This should be explained more. Anything capable of these abilities would NEVER be able to freely roam the facility and sure as hell wouldn't be classified as safe.
7 recorded instances of suvivers
If there are survivors that means there are also people that didn't survive right? How many people has this SCP killed?
speaks at ##### the avarage speed
I'm guessing instead of pounds you mean ███████. You can copy the blacked out text from anywhere on the site and paste it wherever you need it.
apears to be researcher.M-Mulyk who deasepeared in 1997 durring a breach of
And now we are back to who this SCP is. It sounds redundant and should have been completed the first time you brought the subject up.
None of the pictures accompanied with the page nor the sources for said photographs are available, unless they are supposed to be that way, which would make them meaningless to the page. It would be like completely █ing out a part of the page.
The requests should have some kind of structure to them, either bullets or bold and italicized to make it look neat.
The interview title should be bold, look at other successful SCP articles to see what it should look like. Lots of writers use different interview formats so you can either pick one you like or create a new one that still flows well.
If this SCP's name is "M. Mulyk" it should be written as such. Using a hyphen is incorrect and makes the SCP and Doctor look like they are stuttering every time they say its name. Also the "Doctor" and "SCP" should be capitalized as such and the Doctor doesn't need #'s behind his/her name. If it needs to be blacked out then use the █'s.
researcher M-Mulyk correct? do you have any proof
If this SCP was a researcher at the Foundation they would already have complete records of who he is including pictures and most likely DNA/fingerprint records. He wouldn't need proof, they would already know whether it was or wasn't a Foundation worker.
later interviews were redacted…
It would be a lot more interesting to have interesting interviews with a lot redacted or █ed out than a sign that says "yea there were interesting interviews but I wont show you".
To be honest this whole article reads like a mess. There's no single main anomalous property to go off of and you deliberately left out any interesting content from the interviews besides "a forest manifested in his office and some weird aliens showed him around for a while". And inexplicably the Doctor when faced with a major anomaly that could compromise other Foundation personnel just ends the interview. There's very little to work off of in this article and it's so full of grammatical and spelling errors it's almost unreadable.