The current draft is accessible here, in the first tab.
- Clinical tone. I can't seem to nail it down super well, regardless of how hard I try. It's editable, though, so I'll change it where necessary.
- Supplemental material. I'm considering adding interviews with affected individuals, but I'm not sure how much they'd actually add.
- The compulsion. I tried to make it more interesting than "this thing makes you do a thing," but I'm still banking on the effects being interesting enough that people don't say "this is still a thing that makes you do a thing." I need to know if there are ways I can make it more interesting, if necessary (such as with an interview).
- EDIT: It's only now I realize that, while I'm fluent in Google Translate, I can't actually speak Italian, so if anyone wants to correct me on the title, I would offer my gratitude.