Many things wrong with this.
Gonna try to describe it the best i can
THIS TIME WITH MORE FIRE!
thanks :) but do you have any criticism on the actual SCP itself? i get that there were grammar mistakes but this is a draft and im trying to get more criticism on the story rather then the grammar, but thanks anyway!
seriously, got any?
and by that i meant more itself on the story, i need as much advice as possible
So this SCP will disintegrate you if you think about it. That means if you research about it, you disintegrate. That also means that if you read about via Special Containment Procedures, you disintegrate. Therefor making the document itself a containment breach.
If the SCP was real, then not only would it be impossible to contain, but a Special Containment Procedures document couldn't exist. Because the writer would disintegrate before starting.
Overall, I think you should try a different route.
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Hm. Well, there isn't much going on besides the monster multiplying exponentially and killing people. Having the various addenda does lend some progression, and there is a slight buildup up until event -c, but it simply stops after that, and the final note is terribly anticlimatic.
You really should try to clean up the writing here. This is rife with issue to the point of instantly killing immersion. Take a look at some of the Top Rated Pages This Month, to get an idea of the level of quality expected from a mainsite post.
Generic monsters are difficult to pull off nowadays. With a bit more context, and much tighter writing, there's a chance something like this would be viable. The current iteration is nowhere near ready, however.