these would be my first scp's so im still trying to get my feet wet with it. Any help or criticisms are welcome. The link to my sandbox is http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/clockworkchemistry
Okay, uh… generally, we stick to one draft per critique thread. Otherwise, it can get both overwhelming and confusing for the reviewers. ETA: Actually, since both of the drafts seem rather dependent on each other for understanding and even reference each other repeatedly, why not just have one article and put these two things as SCP-XXXX-1 and SCP-XXXX-2? Seems a lot more straightforward.
In regards to the drafts themselves… you've got quite a few grammatical/mechanical errors ("chamber make of thick impact" should be made, and impact-resistant needs a hyphen, "approximately 4 feet" write out all numbers less than 10, "prohibited. From coming" the second sentence is a fragment, and several more).
The main issue is that these seem to be just generic super-special OCs as SCPs. The bolded names look unprofessional (and kind of seem silly, since they remind me of Homestuck) and the unusually specific containment procedures only emphasize the OC-ness that makes the piece seem more focused on the characters and their details rather than telling a compelling story to the reader.
Humanoids are actually among the most difficult types of articles to write successfully; if you're really set on writing one, then first take a look at the humanoid writing guide if you haven't yet. Also, I suggest reading over this essay on common SCP pitfalls to get an idea of what elements to avoid putting in an SCP article.
At this point, I highly recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you make the idea more interesting before you approach drafting again.
thanks a lot for the critique on it. i had actually considered making them just one and yes i have noticed some grammatical errors but i believe i just went blind to some of them. this is why i said they were a work in progress. i had since writing this, actually re-wrote them on my phone in my spare time and fixed some things that seemed odd; like things that make them seem too OCish. ill definitely keep working on it and take your advice.
Get the base concept checked over in the forum I linked you to, before you start working on the draft. It'll save you time in the long run if you start writing the article with an idea that you've confirmed people will receive positively.