I'm upvoting on the basis of well-executed conveyance of characters' emotion, but I will say that (similar to what I said when this was in draft stages a while back) I'm not entirely sure of the backstory or context.
Date: 28 Dec 2016 01:23
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I second Cyantreuse. This was enjoyable, but more backstory would be useful in explaining things (I'm assuming this might be set post-veil loss, seeing as a Foundation researcher is openly talking about their former job).
I write stuff. Yipee.
This sort of thing is attributable to my philosophy in writing fiction, in that I think it's necessary to come up with backstory to make it "realistic." If you were listening in to a real conversation for the amount of time that this tale spans, you wouldn't get the whole picture of what they're talking about; and if any of it was necessary to the point of the tale, then I would either expand it or change the situation accordingly. However, the fact that the loving interaction between father and daughter reached you shows me that I achieved what I wished to.