This one's been languishing on my hard drive for years. It's time to put it to pasture, one way or another. I hope you all like the story of a researcher yelling at a frog monster! Thanks to Cimmerian for feedback.
Date: 05 Jan 2017 03:38
Number of posts: 21
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I really like the anomaly, and the creature it's attached to has a distinct personality, with the pridefulness and hunting techniques. However, the ending just being a scolding seemed very lackluster. It didn't cover any new ground, it only reiterated what had already bee established about the SCP being prideful and not very intelligent. I feel like some more development, maybe expanding on the interview in some way or having them establish the revised containment through trial and error and continued testing culminating in the scolding, rather than having it be the only event.
Whether you like it or not, history is on our side. We will bury you!
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My initial instincts are to say that the article lacks substance, needs more development, etc, but…
My actual emotional reaction to this simple story is a very positive one. There's something to be said for stripping an article down to exactly what's needed - you wanted the image of a researcher berating a petulant frog monster into submission, and everything here serves that purpose, no added fat. It's not everyone's cup of tea, but I adore it.
The pseudo-invisibility is a pretty cool effect but apart from that the anomaly seems a bit generic. There is clear characterization of the monster's personality, and I like that, but at the same time it still feels like the article is missing some impact.
The Interview Log also leaves me torn. On the one hand, the mental image it generates is pretty funny but on the other hand the dialog seems kinda forced and unnatural. I just can't see a real person talking like that.
Aside from that I'm a little confused by the update to the containment procedures. Why is testing required to reduce video lag? That should be just an issue of using better hardware, unless there is something I'm missing.
Overall, this is a no-vote for me. It's not bad by any means but it falls too short for me to upvote.
I'm not against anomalies being scolded for acting like assholes and I'm not against short articles, but the premise is built on a shallow concept, with little followup. Sorry, not feeling this one.
SCP-2786 cannot be seen by the unaided eye save as an afterimage when the eye closes.
Shouldn't that be "save for as an afterimage?"
Edit: After finishing the article, my overall verdict is that I'm seconding Accelerando. Additionally, the dialogue in the interview log is very unnatural, and did not make me laugh (I'm not sure if it was supposed to make me laugh, even, or is just there to be wacky) and the overall concept was killed by said goofy interview.
Update to link to some other things I guess.