Hello, this is my draft for the contest.
The Link: http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/bananarepublic-4 first tab.
Thank you for looking over this in advance.
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The draft is a very basic and simplistic take on the concept of alternate history. I may dare compare this to be a lesser version of the many alternate history stuff done on deviantart and other sites. While those pieces can go in-depth into the alternate history, this draft seems to be going too broad and end up being shallow in its content.
The actual alternate histories shown here are more or less mundane and staple for the genre (I mean, the 20th century is one of the most frequent POD for alternate history). Thus, it would easily feel stale from the get-go. The GOC-Foundation War could be interesting, but there is not enough depth for readers to feel anything for this hypothetical scenario.
Also, I do not appreciate the note at the end. It felt like you are just telling us the motivation behind the broadcast in a straightforward way, and have a straightforward rationale behind it. I feel that has lessened the impact for your article, hampering the not-so-high enjoyment level thus far.
Thus, I recommend you to focus on specific alternate histories and do something beyond the conventional alternate history stories. You may also want to consider how to express the motivation. A note at the end can work, but it would be stronger if it leaves more questions for the reader than confirming the reader's guesses.
OK, so, I added in more stuff about alternate timelines. They are all know in the same universe.
the link: http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/bananarepublic-4 first tab