I realise the writing is shoddy as hell, so suggestions for neatening it are welcome, as are all other suggestions for it.
The writing isn't nearly as bad as you seem to think, though it does lack somewhat in conveying the creep factor of the concept. More emphasis on the effects would be nice, to really play up the whole "you can't trust your ears" aspect. The total recovery post-coma is a little too neat - perhaps some lasting degree of paranoia and/or antisocial tendencies? After all, shortly pre-coma anything said to them was perceived as something bad enough to provoke a violent response, and that's not the kind of thing you're likely to instantly bounce back from emotionally. Also, maybe have _% of cases get stuck at the stage where they misinterpret everything, for the horror of someone stuck spending the rest of their life unable to properly understand anything people say to them.
I added an interview. I have no idea if it adds to the article or not, but it was floating about my mind so I added it. Comments?