Said cell is to be hermetically sealed to prevent contamination from foreign elements.
What would be the purpose of this? Seems a bit like overkill.
SCP-XXXX is not allowed to interact with any member of Site-17 personnel for any reason.
Since it's locked up to begin with, I don't think anyone would be interacting with it so this line could be omitted.
SCP-XXXX does not appear to require any kind of sustenance, so none is to be provided.
I'd just say something like: SCP-XXXX does not require sustenance.
For at least one (1) hour per day, as a reward for good behavior, SCP-XXXX has the choice to freely roam Site-17 and interact with personnel.
Still can't say I'm a huge fan of this. Honestly, I think this article as a whole would benefit if it got away from the whole "X was allowed to do what it wanted until something bad happened" thing. Otherwise, I'm a bit reminded of SCP-1048 in the sense that the same thing happened in it and both these anomalous share the same trait of making other versions of themselves.
SCP-XXXX stands at 1.2 meters tall and is fully capable of movement and speech
I'd change the first part of this to say: SCP-XXXX is 1.2 meters tall
SCP-XXXX's appearance varies from instance to instance.
Still think a note should be made saying that SCP-XXXX is a collective designation.
—When not in the process of an SCP-XXXX-1 event, SCP-XXXX has been reported to be polite to Foundation staff, often offering to help when it feels that it is needed. SCP-XXXX is rude to all Foundation staff, often making derogatory comments towards personnel. — SCP-XXXX is inadvertently hostile towards the Foundation.
I'd take this out, honestly. This ties back in with my point about this straying too close to 1048.
SCP-XXXX-A appears to be the source of SCP-XXXX's anomalous properties, apparently rotating itself using an unknown energy source to power SCP-XXXX.
Couldn't observation be used to find out whether or not this was the case?
Direct analysis is impossible, since SCP-XXXX-A is always sealed within a chamber within SCP-XXXX locked in a way not yet understood, and attempting contact with SCP-XXXX-A during the Transfer phase of SCP-XXXX-1 will result in [DATA REDACTED].
They couldn't observe it outside of its containment cell? Or try to inquire about its source of power since it is capable of speech?
SCP-XXXX will disregard personnel, and has been noted to simply walk around them in the search of materials.
The tone at the end of the article slips a bit, I'd just say it actively avoids them along with disregarding them.
SCP-XXXX will often deploy various tools from within itself that it has been either unable or unwilling to deploy not during an SCP-XXXX-1 event.
I'd still like to know where these tools are stored otherwise.
eight (8) seconds later
The 8 is a bit unnecessary, if a number is less than ten writing it out is fine.
For all intents and purposes, this new automaton is now SCP-XXXX.
Eh, isn't is just an instance of SCP-XXXX? Or does the old addition vanish or cease its anomalous properties? This could be explained better.
after his wife had a miscarriage, SCP-XXXX-B fell into depression, and spent most of his time creating sculptures. He created an approximate ██ sculptures out of various materials, one of these sculptures being SCP-XXXX
Are any of the other sculptures anomalous or was this the only one? If so, what made this one anomalous compared to the others? Was it created differently or for a sole purpose? This could be an interesting narrative thread to further explore.
Side note: You don't need to make the interviews separate pages. Just put them in a collapsible.
In the first interview, how would the interviewer know what the entity calls its transformations if they didn't know it could speak English? As an aside, I snorted over the spray tan line, in a good way. I can't say I'm a huge fan of the second interview of the last few addenda for that matter. I kind of like the idea that this thing is just generally curious and trying to be helpful rather than trying to harm people for no apparent reason. It seems to go against its original motive and feels kind of forced? I dunno, I just think it could be refreshing to see something not just randomly develop a hostile will towards personnel, rather it just maintains its idle curiosity and continuously tries to better itself.
This is a marked improvement over the previous draft though, and I'm glad to see a couple of things I brought up have been fixed, but I still feel as if the general direction of this could use some improvement. To be specific, is this going to follow the route of the first interview log and the motive that is revealed for this entity, or is it going to follow what we see in the secondary log? I personally prefer the first interview and the general direction being taken there, but I suggest picking one and remaining consistent throughout the rest of the draft, as is, it feels a bit disjointed.
As always, feel free to send me a PM once this has been revised!