This SCP and the hopefully soon-to-come series of tales surrounding it were the result of a challenge posed to me by DrMagnus. Thanks to Zyn and communism will win for giving me some advice on the creation process.
ACal, I've just locked two other threads you've created for the same article.
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I'm not sure about the idea. I'm pretty sure that it's original though.
The good: You do a pretty good job of conveying emotion through the interview. It's worded like phrases people would actually use. The containment procedures are concise and reasonable. No complaints there.
The fact that it's cheese though…this is 110% subjective, but I find it hard to take seriously because of it. That being said, I also think of the umpteenth time someone wants to make a virus that makes…I don't know, their eyes blow out of their heads and spray strange fluids everywhere to try and be creepy. Trying to make it more serious and disturbing would most likely take away from the originality. I'm conflicted, if it wasn't obvious.
So yeah: Your writing? Promising! The idea? Ehh…It's not bad, it's original…but I have trouble taking it seriously. I'd probably neutral vote on this if it were posted as-is.
Yeah, the premise is something kinda tender.
I want to keep it as cheese; my reasoning being that it's unique, it's incredibly common when you think about it, and incredibly difficult to contain. And I feel it has to be kinda serious, because it does turn people into cheese.
That being said, I can edit. If you have any idea how to make it better in the sense of originality not conflicting with seriousness, do tell, because I'm gonna experiment with this. Overall, cheers for the feedback!
Keter, Undergoing Neutralization
Nobody else does this. Not even 682, the single most obvious thing the Foundation wants to kill at all costs, has this.
Just make it Keter. People are gonna downvote you for that.
Otherwise, though, I love it. You have a +1 from me. I don't think its weirdness contradicts itself at all - and it's in that weird place where I don't know whether it's funny or horrifying, which is always a good place to be. Kudos for writing the first gustatory cognitohazard I've ever seen.
Edit: Oh, and bonus points if you get a picture of some actual Gorgonzola to put up. It might sound trite, but I vastly prefer SCPs with pictures - not because it improves the writing, but because it feels "right." A giant foundation like this would take photos of the stuff its containing unless it's a visual cognitohazard.