Summoned by PM, running low on brainpower, but hey here we go here are my thoughts. Comments made as I read:
- Why is the picture so far down? Usually the image coding goes right under the rating module.
- "SCP-3000's door has been upgraded with a Level 4 Clearance Lock." > hyphen, Level-4. Also, why bother with the lock upgrade and just state that it requires Level-4 clearance to access?
- "Only personnel with a Level 4 Clearance or higher" > The O5 council, from what I recall, is generally assumed to not be allowed any direct contact with anomalies. Also, "Level-4 clearance".
- may use SCP-3000's door" > what about going through the door into the chamber? Do they only have clearance to open the door?
- "under O5 approval." > I think the correct idiomatic phrasing is "with approval".
- "Research personnel must submit to an extensive background check" > why not just state that they are to undergo a background check or the background check is required? "must submit" seems a little odd of a way to word it.
- "before applying for permission to enter SCP-3000." > Wait, but I thought only Level-4 people had access to this. Level-4 is site directors and MTF commanders, not your usual grunt-work researchers.
- "Any history of terminations of instances within SCP-3000 is grounds for denial of exploration." > this sentence doesn't really make sense. Is it someone having history that denies them exploration? Currently, the sentence reads like exploration is to be denied entirely should there be any history of termination… so if it ever happens, then the thing is locked forever.
- Why poplar wood? The skeptical part of me looked it up, and it seems to be a utility wood often used for cabinets and other furniture. Not sure about doors.
- "The exterior of this closet appears to consist of a poplar wood door" > this reads like the entirety of the closet fits within the door space. Does the exterior not have any walls?
- "Both the door and handle of SCP-3000 do not appear to possess any abnormalities in their composition or basic function." > trim it down, the door and handle are non-anomalous.
- Pretty sure the footnote goes before the comma, but someone can check me on that.
- "per square meter, which is relatively equivalent to an overcast day" > equivalent to that of
Skimmed the rest, since I was tired.
I dunno about this. It felt kind of… predictable, I guess? Especially with that title, I felt like I could kind of predict what was going to happen.
I wonder if this would be stronger if there was something unexpected. Something good stuck inside that closet along with the skeletons. The idea of "burying the past means burying the good along with the bad you want to forget", that kind of route. And maybe sometimes people go into the closet of their own volition. I dunno. It's just kind of… not very scary, I suppose, since I feel like I've seen variants on this sort of approach before?