Please give specific examples of changes!
Alright, received a PM request, here we go. Comments made as I read:
Containment: Pretty unprofessional, to be completely honest. Definitely double-check your research background info so this sounds like it's written by someone who knows the science behind it.
Description: also unprofessional. Lots of small issues that make it hard to take seriously.
Overall… it's not that interesting, sorry. There's some nice imagery to be had here, but it's drowned out by the unprofessional tone that makes it hard for a reader to believe that an actual scientist is writing this.
Keep in mind that most of the writers here have college-level writing experience and are familiar with professional tone. Have you taken any AP-level high school writing classes, by chance?
I think this is all great advice and will begin to fix all of these things immediately. Over all do you think it is a good idea though?
It's kind of bland for an SCP idea. It might work better as a tale, but either way, you're going to need to improve your basic writing skills. What grade are you in currently?
Alright, but I don't feel comfortable reveling that kind of information.
just add salt, it sounds like you're underage. Your writing and typing style is a lot like another user, Alpha-2, who was banned just a few days ago for being underage. Don't forget, you'll be able to reapply once you become of age, but if you sockpuppet - as in, use a separate account to circumvent a ban - you'll get permanently banned. Forever. Even once you become of age.