I put up a draft about this two weeks ago. I know, I know, one post per draft, but I've had zero traffic for over a week. "So put it on the chat," you say. Well, I can't connect to the chat. I get "Connecting" for hours on end. So, I figured I'd just try my luck here again and hope I didn't get blasted. Sorry.
I got a little critique from Reddit, which was mostly (unhelpful) arguing about what my skip should do. Please, none of that, unless you can actually explain how I've done something stupid.
Anyway, this is my second skip. It might be a bit confusing, and I'm unsure about some tonal stuff, so any help with clarification would be greatly appreciated.